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Nowadays people use social media to keep up with the news. Why do they do this? Is it a positive or negative trend?

#people #media #news #trend
Social
media
 has been used as a source of
information
, not just as a relaxing time or a way to meet
people
. It is easier to access the
news
 in the same source as you go for fun, it is
also
 a form to show
information
 to
people
 even when they are not looking
for
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. In
this
 essay, I will expose positives and negatives trends and explain why I feel
this
 is a good development amid technology and
information
.
People
 do not always
realised
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 that they are being bombarded with
information
 because it is all mixed up around nice pictures of some friend going to the beach and a fire that has been caught in time by the firefighters, namely. Others, choose
the
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social
media
 to look for the
news
 as an easy and fast way to access daily
information
, with just enough details and some pictures of it to give an overview of what is happening without that extended and boring line with just too many details to be read. Even though
,
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 the use of social
media
 as a source of
information
 is good, there are still some negative points. There
are
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 just too
many
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information
 coming from different sources that not always are reliable,
such
 as
people
 who share
news
 through what’s app groups, and
not
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 often check the background of what it is being passed forward. Despite the negative aspects, there are countless benefits that
makes
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people
 opt for it. It would be almost impossible to keep up with the
news
 without the benefit of technology, and using
facebook
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Facebook
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,
instagram
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Instagram
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 or
twitter
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Twitter
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 as a form of sharing and receiving recent
news
 is a better and more sustainable way. In conclusion, there are pros and cons for using social
media
 in search of
information
 and the reasons for that vary.
However
, it is clear that the positive impact it brings to society
are
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 far beyond the risks and damage that can be done. Having social
media
 working in favour of knowledge is
an
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amazing progress done by society.
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