People can use a mobile phone to answer work and home calls at any place, or 7 days a week. Do you think there are more negative or positive effects on both individuals and society?

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era is an era of technology. These days everyone has their own personal smartphone. People use their mobile
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work
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anytime. In my opinion, it has more advantages of using mobile
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anywhere and anytime.
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essay will discuss it in
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paragraphs.
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with, there are many advantages of using smartphones at
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or
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.
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, an employee can communicate with other branch's employees by sitting at one place. It saves time and cost to commute.
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, some people are far from their family members they can talk anytime with them.
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week my friend was going
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hometown by bus. When he reached his hometown he found that his luggage is missing.
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he
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to the cops and registered FIR.
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, it has many advantages of having
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a mobile
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phone
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.
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contrary
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there are some drawbacks of using
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phone
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work
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24 by 7. When
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rings employees get distracted from their
work
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. Their productivity decreases.
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, in a
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firm, it was found that when employees
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to use mobile phones anytime
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productivity decreases.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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