Some people think that it is beneficial for children to do paid work, While others think it can be harmful for children . What are the advantages and disadvantages.

It is often argued that
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doing paid jobs is good for the
chlidren
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children
because they have money for their own expenses.
On the other hand
, some people
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it because it affects their studies.
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. By doing paid work, children become
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and they have money to buy the things which their parents can not afford. To explain
this
, some people do basic employment with low remuneration which is not enough to
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the demands of their kids.
Moreover
, it
also
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their knowledge about
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society by meeting different kinds of people at the work .
For instance
, In a survey, in Italy, 60%
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did work in their vacations and helped their parents to run the expenses.
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if the children do some kind of employment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • beneficial
  • harmful
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • financial independence
  • responsibility
  • valuable skills
  • impact
  • education
  • exploitation
  • negative effects
  • social life
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