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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is often thought that choosing what an individual
wears
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 is associated with that person’s culture as well as upbringing. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the reasons why choosing the set of
clothes
 would not affect anyone’s character, before arriving at a conclusion. Personally, I disagree with the statement because
clothes
 do not define an individual. The culture of a country is represented by history as well as
environment
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, and not the personal preferences of its citizens. Sometimes,
clothes
 are even associated with social status. An excellent illustration of
this
 is that in the Philippines, those below the poverty line cannot afford
purchasing
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 proper clothing.
Nonetheless
, they are the ones who are known to be the most hardworking and credible people.
In addition
,
clothes
 would not define how ethical a person is.
For example
, a young boy
who
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choses
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chooses
chose
wearing
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 ragged shirts, loose pants, and slippers does not equal
him
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being ill-mannered. It just shows that he may be comfortable in wearing these compared with their traditional
clothes
.
Although
, it should always be considered that there are specific clothing for special occasions that should be worn with the
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 respect. In conclusion, others think that the choice of
clothes
 represents where a person came from as well as how well he or she grew up. Clothing is considered
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a privilege.
Also
, it is a way to express comfort.
However
, it should be taken into consideration that certain pieces of clothing must be worn with dignity. Personally, I strongly believe that people’s preferences should be separated from their beliefs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • garments
  • traditional attire
  • sartorial choices
  • expressive style
  • cultural identity
  • psychological implications
  • non-verbal cues
  • globalization
  • perceptions
  • professional demeanor
  • societal norms
  • economic constraints
  • subcultures
  • fashion movements
  • individualism
  • stereotype
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