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Nowadays some countries encourage people to buy more and more products, which is good for economy. While others believe it is bad for the society. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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At present days, the public in some nations
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 motivated to purchase goods, which has aroused a discussion between different groups of
people
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. While encouraging to buying
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 is beneficial to a nation's
economy
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, I believe it is certainly detrimental to social development when
people
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 make unnecessary purchases. It certainly enhances the development of
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economy
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 when a greater number of
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 are willing to consume. The growth in the number of consumers means greater consumer demand, which definitely contributes to the development of some businesses.
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, during the period of the Olympic Games, there is a noticeable rise in the need
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 sports goods and facilities. Companies which specialize in
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 field receive more orders during
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 time, thereby making greater profit during
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 time.
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, more job opportunities are created since more workers are needed to manufacture adequate goods to meet the need of customers.
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, if more money is spent on items that are more than what
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 really need, the consequences can be detrimental to
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society.
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 of all,
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behavior
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 can result in waste. These products are not always necessary or satisfactory, which means they are very likely to be left untouched or even thrown away. It is not rare to see a seemingly fabulous coat that was bought on impulse stay in the closet without being put on again.
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, encouraging
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 to buy more and more
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 is not helpful for
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 to form a positive attitude toward consumption. When they are used to
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 a style of consuming, they may become addicted to buying
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 without thinking carefully about whether they really need those
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 or not. Nowadays, a number of young adults are keen on buying flashy
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, some of which,
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,
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 too pricey for them to afford,
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 as cutting-edged laptops, brand new cellphones, etc.
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, some of them choose to pay by credit card, ignoring the potential danger of
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 kind of payment. In conclusion, while it is true that consumption is an integral part of a nation's
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 and encouraging
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 to buy products can boost the
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 to a certain extent,
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 encouragement does harm to
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society when
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 don't base their purchases on their real demands and purchasing power.
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