Some people think that children should learn to paint or draw at school. Others believe it is just a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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system
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more advance as along with essential
subjects
, other curriculum activities are
also
included in the schools.Many people assume that scholars have to acquired
skills
of
art
whereas other consider
this
a wastage of valuable time. I will discuss both
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in the following paragraphs. On the one hand,despite theoretical
subjects
,paint and drawing
also
be teach to the students so that they attain much learning practices in the learning institutes,
for example
,one can
also
make his future in
this
field and earn a good income too.
Besides
,it
also
polish
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the child's cognitive
skills
and
help
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to accomplish other tasks too,to illustrates
this
,recent
studies
revealed that by gaining knowledge regarding artistic skill,a learner
also
be utilise
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his imagination in a better way,it is concluded that
this
skill improves other abilities too.
On the other hand
,drawing and painting
also
increase
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the burden
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on
trainee
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the trainee
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,by site an example,a survey conducted from a school
studies
pattern resulted that the adolescents who are doing both theory
subjects
and
art
subjects
not
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give their best in both fields as more energy is needed to
fulfill
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these tasks.
However
, students
also
consider
this
a
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extra topic of study which
not
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provide
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them efficient knowledge as compared to other
studies
such
as,a child I know,who lives near to my home once said that
art
skills
are not much necessary as other learning material,it is useless in future. According to my opinion,rather than adding
art
skills
as equally important as other
studies
,educationalists should involve basics of painting and drawing in the syllabus of teenagers who are interested in
this
field so that children
not
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get tensed regarding extra study material and
also
it
help
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to acquire sufficient knowledge of
art
skills
. In conclusion,it is concluded from the above discussion that
education
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the education
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system should involve artistic
skills
in the
studies
of the children who have
interest
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an interest
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in drawing and painting but not to give
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importance to
this
field.
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