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Some people advocate death penalty for those who committed violent crimes.Others say that capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society. Describe adavantages and disadvantages of death penalty and give your own opinion.

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Majority
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admit
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, that
death
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penalty
 is for committed violent
crimes
.
On the other hand
, others claim
capitl
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capital
punishment
 is not available in
contemporaty
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contemporary
 society. In my view,
the
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capital
punishment
 isn'
t
 advantageous for those who'll do violent
crimes
. Everything has
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pros
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prons
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pros
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 and cons, as that kind of
punishment
 has
adavantages
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advantages
 and disadvantages. At
first
, close people of
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a figure
the figure
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 who was terrified with a criminal will ask to commit death
penalty
 , due to they want to do the same thing to an offender.In that way, there aren'
t
happened
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 any fairness
among
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 the criminal and the victim, I guess.
Therefore
, the government or judge
shoild
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should
advice
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 what will be
more
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safer and more reliable.
Otherwise
,
conflict
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the conflict
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 won'
t
 delete and decrease. Unfortunately,
people'll
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people
 lead with the offender by killing without any aid
of
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 the government.In my point of view,
an
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and
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 identity needs
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a referee
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 on the way of implementing the solution which is honest,
fairness
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 and without any
crimes
.
However
, nowadays bulky
type
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types
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 of violent
crimes
 have been happening more
oftenly
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often
 than the previous time, as we watch it from
news
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the news
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 by TV.
Although
,
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person
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the person
a person
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being became
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 more cruel and brutal and it should be noted, some of them wouldn'
t
 be afraid
from
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of
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 anything and don'
t
 regret.
Admitedly
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Admittedly
, we may decline
those kind
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those kinds
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 of so-called
crimininals
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criminals
 by
death
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the death
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penalty
, solely. To sum up, it'll be better to create
other
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another penalty
other penalties
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penalty
, which will be more
advantegeous
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advantageous
 for offenders rather than
the
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apply
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capital
punishment
.
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