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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

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Brain drain is increasingly becoming common in undeveloped countries.
This
essay
 will discuss leading causes of migration, including lack of resources and living
conditions
.
This
essay
 will
also
 suggest solutions to
this
 problem, including better working
conditions
 and timely wages. A significant number of physicians have to
work
 with the lack of resources.
In addition
, they do not have
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better living
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better-living
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better living
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conditions
.
For example
, In April 2021, India witnessed the
second
 wave of COVID-19, with the limited number of experts made many doctors
work
 day in and day out;
moreover
, due to limited resources, they were unable to save hundreds of people's lives.
On the contrary
, the doctors working with public hospitals do not get their salaries because of crunches in the economy. These reasons lead to a stressful working life. Timely wages and better working
conditions
 both are critical to mitigate migration problems.
Therefore
, the authorities have to ensure that they provide better working
conditions
 with ample
equipments
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 for doctors to treat their patients in the hospitals.
In addition
, they have to ensure they get paid timely, as they
also
 have the responsibility of their families.
For instance
, the government can allocate funds to tackle
such
 crises during the pandemic time.
Therefore
, to ensure their professionals
work
 in their own country, they have to implement these changes. In conclusion, In today's world people are becoming more aware of
such
 relocating policies and before starting their career in their own country, they prefer to move abroad for their studies and get a job there.
This
essay
 discussed how limited assets and worse living
conditions
 made people move abroad.
This
essay
also
 suggested that the solutions to
this
 problem are twofold; to manage timely income and provide better assets to
work
.
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