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In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

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In the old days, shopping was believed to be a routine in-home task.
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 in those times tended to do grocery shopping and purchase mostly what was necessary for their lives.
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, at present, numerous
people
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 consider shopping as a leisure activity and satisfy their own needs.  
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 of all, it is obvious that advertising on TV, social media, and in magazines tempts
people
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 to buy products and luxury items they don’t need. They just purchase those things because of the pressure from their peers and society that they must keep up with the latest trends and improve their self-esteem. Surprisingly, a great number of
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 find shopping therapeutic because they can take their minds off their problems and find it relaxing.   At the same time, shopping malls and shopping centres are on every corner of the streets. These places undoubtedly offer all-day facilities to encourage
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 to spend more time there. They buy on impulse due to the atmosphere and background music in the shop. As a consequence,
people
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 often purchase products or objects which are unnecessary.
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, these days, credit cards and digital money
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 play significant roles in the rising shopping trend as it is convenient for
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 to go on a shopping spree.   In conclusion, from my perspective, I strongly believe that the trend of shopping is definitely positive and will dramatically grow in the future. Individuals will go shopping both in physical shops and online as they enjoy it and consider it now as a recreational activity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • retail therapy
  • materialism
  • disposable income
  • economic growth
  • financial instability
  • environmental impact
  • social interaction
  • community building
  • emotional satisfaction
  • advertising influence
  • shopping habits
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