Stress related illness are becoming increasingly common .what do you think the causes of this ? What solutions can you suggest?

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sickness including longer working
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and poor diet choices .
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balance and healthy lifestyle .
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nowadays are working longer
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than ever before .the growing competitions
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many believe that putting on longer
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will help them gain recognition and will help them to climb up the ladder at workspaces .
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many are suffering from severe
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and sickness followed it.The best solution is to find
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should give equal importance to their personal
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as well .Taking
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from
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, engaging in leisure time activities with one's family all help to destress a person.
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, man are least bothered about their dietary habits .
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cause some to eat more and others to skip their meals
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often forgot that our body needs optimum nutrition to perform at
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best levels .the
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entirely on each individual by making healthier food choices indulging themselves in physical activities .these will help them to improve their health and reduces the risk of future
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illness . In
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more and more
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are suffering from
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issues .these
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and poor dietary habits. The only solution to these
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, eat
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and create a proper
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balance .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stress-related illnesses
  • rapid pace
  • pressure
  • balance
  • omnipresent
  • information overload
  • disconnect
  • economic uncertainties
  • job insecurity
  • financial stress
  • environmental factors
  • chronic stress
  • work-life balance
  • flexible working hours
  • mental health
  • support programs
  • physical activity
  • healthy eating habits
  • awareness
  • accessibility
  • counseling
  • stress management
  • community environment
  • reconnect with nature
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