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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In many countries, most of the educational institutions are supported by the government because the private institutions are costly because they are maintained by
the
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private organizations. Some
people
 believe that the parents of children to attend private school should not need to contribute to
state
 schools through taxes. I disagree with
this
 viewpoint.
Firstly
, the government does not force
people
 to send their children to private schools, when they decide to send,
then
 they accept the high fees willingly. If the
state
 would reduce taxes for these
people
, the budget of the authority would be affected. The politics would not able to decide the real amount of
tax
 reduction as it would be a long process.
Secondly
,
people
also
 pay the taxes of other services which they never use,
for instance
, some
people
 never call police or fire brigade at any time their lives but still they pay
tax
 for these services.
Finally
, mostly wealthy
people
 choose high paid institutes for their kids, if they stop paying
tax
then
 there might be a situation that poor
people
 pay more
tax
 than rich
people
.
However
, the regime manages the
state
 education system by the high
tax
 payer's
tax
 amount
otherwise
, it would be a hard time for the government to managing the
state
 support education system.
Moreover
, it would be beneficial for society to have a high-quality schooling organization with equal rights for young children, so everyone should contribute through duty to support the
state
 learning structure. In conclusion, in my opinion, every eligible citizen, no matter whether they send their kids to which institution, should pay the expense.
This
 is the best way to keep education for poor parents and affordable for middle-class
people
.
This
 will result in a well-educated workforce.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tax exemption
  • public education
  • private schools
  • collective responsibility
  • societal welfare
  • equitable access
  • financial burden
  • social cohesion
  • tax credits
  • vouchers
  • subsidies
  • state-funded
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • public vs. private sector
  • quality of education
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