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people naturally resist making changes in their lives. what kind of problem can this cause ? what solution can you suggest?

#people #changes #lives
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Sometimes
people
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’s unconscious prevents them from being part of a new experience in their
life
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, and I think
this
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 may cause
people
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 never start new challenges (jobs, business, studies…) and after years they stay in
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 stage as they were before. One effective way which is psychologist taking about
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 learning from previous mistakes and take it as
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a bridge
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 to the future. Everybody had bad memories from the time they decided
making
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change
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a change
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 in their
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,
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 suddenly everything went wrong, and they could not reach
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their goals at that moment, but the point is they could try harder for
next
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 time. they should stand after each fall if they want to build their
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 and learn from
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the repercussion
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repercussion
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last
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 decisions. Every person who wants
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changes
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 in their
life
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,
they
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should make new habits. Recent research shows us takes 21 days to make a new habit,
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 if someone usually
wake
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 up at noon it takes 21 days to change and get used to early morning, the problem is
people
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 do not have enough patient and desire for these
changes
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then
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 they void doing them at all. I think the obvious solution is they persist to
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, it seems small and inconsiderable and
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 their steps with hope because if
people
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 making
changes
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 progressively it might be easier for them. In conclusion,
people
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 they must know that making mistakes is the way to understands what the problems are and how to fix them,
therefor
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 they should not have fears from accepting new challenges in their
life
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 because of the oncoming mistakes in the future,
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 they could get professional
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 from
psychologist
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a psychologist
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 to accomplish
changes
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. They
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 should be aware that every change takes time, and they could not jump to
new
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a new
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 lifestyle
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  • Conclusion

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