Some people says that adverting is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people thinks that advertising is so common that we no longer to pay attention to it. Discuss both sides of view and give your own opinion.

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Advertising is
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of the things that has become prevalent in our society
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and its all-encompassing nature has been
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exacerbated by our reliance on modern technology
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. I do believe in the power it has when influencing
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’s purchasing decisions.
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, it is important that it must be done right to be able to unleash its full potential.
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, I will be looking into the aspects of advertising that has made it so powerful.
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thing that
advertisements
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benefit from
today
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is the internet. Many big technology companies
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as Google, Facebook and Amazon collect data from our browsing habits
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as the websites we visit, the items we click on and the duration we spend on a website.
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data is more commonly known as cookies. With
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data, they are able to create a personal profile for each individual and use that to personalise and tailor
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, if
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was shopping for handbags online, all they would see in the advertisement ecosystem would be handbags. It is
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nature of personalising
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that
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them powerful as they make you more likely to buy things.
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,
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nowadays use a variety of techniques to elicit various emotions by depicting different situations and selling the upsides.
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example
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, a recent Heineken commercial capitalised on the Euro 2020 tournament to show a group of friends having fun while drinking Heineken and watching football to make more consumers interested in buying their beer over their competitors’. Another advertisement for diapers used a scene of a mother easily changing her baby’s diapers and heaving a sigh of relief using
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particular brand.
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would have made parents more likely to buy
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brand to reduce some of the stress they experience when taking care of a baby. These are just two aspects of advertising that have made it so powerful in influencing ones purchasing decisions
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, when advertising is overdone and done in
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wrong way, people no longer pay attention to it and may even boycott the product
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being advertised. The important thing with advertising is that it has to be done with the correct frequency. Too few
ads
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may not result in the desired outcome of increasing purchases.
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, too many
ads
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will shun people away.
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example
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is advertising on the popular video-sharing platform, YouTube. Nowadays many videos have multiple
ads
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in the middle of the video and in many
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these
ads
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cannot be skipped.
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results in viewers being unhappy with the
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and creates a negative effect for the company as lesser people will buy their products.
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,
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have to be properly placed for them to be effective. No
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wants a page full ad taking up their screen when they are reading news or browsing other websites. Another thing that advertisers have to keep in mind is designing the advertisement correctly.
Pepsi
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is a notable culprit for not designing
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ads
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correctly.
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example
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is an ad
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years ago where Kendall Jenner, a famous celebrity, handed a white police officer a can of
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. The ad
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involved imagery of the Black Lives Matter movement where they were protesting police brutality. Wanting to promote a message of peace and unity,
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instead
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faced a huge backlash as they were called out for trivialising the movement. More recently,
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also
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suffered when Cristiano Ronaldo, the famous footballer, moved two bottles of
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away from the camera from their well-placed product placement spot during a press conference in the Euro 2020 tournament. Ronaldo moved the bottles as he did not want to promote
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to his fans, a product that he himself does not consume.
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action caused
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to lose approximately $4B USD in the stock market.
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, when advertising is not done correctly, it has a negative effect on its success. All in all, I still believe that advertising is extremely successful in persuading us to buy things. When it is done correctly, like the company Apple
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has branded themselves and their products as meant for creatives and game changers, it has a lot of power.
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, many companies like Google and
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(the newspaper) sustain their search engine and newspaper respectively via
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. These instances give
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the biggest endorsements and testament to
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success in influencing our purchasing decisions. For if they were not powerful, they would not be kept in use even
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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