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Some people think that cars should be banned from large cities. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

#people #cars #cities
Banning
cars
 from larger
cities
 will be helpful to the society in many ways.
Thought
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 a few people consider
car
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a car
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 ban inconvenient, others believe
this
 will be a great benefit to the environment,
as well as
,
economy
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the economy
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. In my essay, I will be discussing the benefits and alternative solutions for blanketing them from metro regions. Albeit,
cars
 are the most considerable and convenient source of transportation, they do come with a few
noticable
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noticeable
notable
 pushbacks. These vehicles are the highest
emmiter's
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emitters
 of
carbon-di-oxide
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carbon dioxide
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 in
todays
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today's
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 world.
For example
, in the year 2018, Delhi (India), was facing a devastating climatic attack, where the pollution has blocked visibility to 60%. Scientists have deeply investigated and concluded that it was because of pollution. During
this
 period of time,
Delhi
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the Delhi
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 government has taken strict action and banned usage of automobiles using petrol or diesel to enter the CBD.
Apart from
this
, these
mechinery
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machines
machinery
also
 lead to traffic jams. Considering these factors, out of many others, most countries have restricted
cars
to enter
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from entering
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into
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apply
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cities
.
Therefore
, providing
alternative's
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alternatives
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 like convenient local transportation
have
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has
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 proven to be helpful. Various nations are already implementing these techniques,
whereas
, underdeveloped regions are yet seemingly inconsiderable.
However
,
for instance
, if local
transporation
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transportation
 is time-to-time and relatively lower than fuel expenses, citizens would consider it. Taking Australia as an example, the trams in
main
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the main
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 city
center
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centre
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 are
one-to-two-minutes
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one to two minutes
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 gapped and highly
effecient
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efficient
. In
such
 cases, why would someone pay for expensive parking? Offering solutions
such
 as above will greatly impact the public to drop-off driving
in
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on
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popullated
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populated
 roads. In conclusion, I believe that
cars
 should be banned from larger
cities
; whereafter, providing better metro services. I agree with the statement and strongly support car bans from larger
cities
, provided substitutions are developed.
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