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Some people believe that study is important to success; others say that there tis no relation between study and success. Discuss both views. Give your opinion based on your experience

Studying is the way to success, but some people succeed despite failing in school. So today I'm going to dig into these two views. Studying will give you a lot of knowledge
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 with that knowledge, you will have a solid foundation for thinking and acting.
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, when you want to perform a calculation, you need to know the rules. To know the rules, you need to learn.
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, the job market is very complex. You won'
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 get a job if you don'
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 have a good background. So studying will prove
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 have a good level. It will be easier to apply for a job because before you start working, what they know about you is your certificates and diplomas. Learning supports research. When you have a complex problem, the best way to find the answer is to
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, there are still many people who succeed even without studying. It doesn'
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 matter how much you
study
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 or how hard you
study
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. If you don'
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 have the opportunity to shine, you can'
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 succeed. So expanding relationships is equally important. For talented people, even though they don'
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study
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, they still succeed because they understand how to develop their talents. If a person can sing well,
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 they can choose to become a singer
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 of studying things they are not good at. Learning is
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 not necessary if their dreams don'
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 it. To
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, both views have their own merits. And it's up to you to make your judgments about success and learning.

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Task response
Be clear in the end. Say if you agree or not with the idea that study leads to success. Give one clear view in one line.
Task response
Add one strong example for each view and show how it backs your point.
Coherence
Use good linking words to join parts. Use Next, Also, However for flow.
Grammar
Fix small errors in grammar and use plain, clear form.
Content
The essay shows both views.
Structure
It has clear blocks and easy to read.
Clarity
Ideas are easy to follow for most readers.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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