In the past, most people lived in the countryside and worked in farming. Some people believe that this was a better way of life than the way most people live today. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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majority of the
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extensively moving from rural
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to
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city
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side.
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,at the same
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some
people
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like to follow traditional agrarian
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and they
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that it helps to give them a better
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. My knowledge proves the notion that
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in
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village
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gives more benefit among
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which will
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in the following paragraphs.
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countryside
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the countryside
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provides numerous benefits
among
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people
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to restore their
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meaningful. Undoubtedly, agriculture is the primary occupation of villagers and it results
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self-sufficiency among the
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.
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village
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are the main producers of all organic food and materials, it will
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rest of the population as well.
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, the main characteristics of rural
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consists
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less population, healthy environment cooperation and coordination among neighbours and
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brings
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environment for
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's to live.
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, according to
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health organisation study of happiness in 2016 points out that 75% of villages are happier than
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life
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. Apparently, in urban
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areas
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we can get good transportation, living standard and better
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education
.
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,
city
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life
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is more stressful and most of the families over there are broken. Admittedly,
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city
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is the land of
anonimous
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anonymous
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because no one care about others and all of them are living in their own nutshell. Reportedly, while comparing crime rates and suicide, urban
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taken over the
first
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position.To illustrate
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, statistical crime rates of India shows that majority of criminal activities are happening in cities so it will show the advantages of
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village
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the village
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. In conclusion, there is a saying a 'bird without wings '
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man needs a peaceful
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.
village
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life
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provides
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and prosperous experience for its inmates and it always
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the relationship between human beings and
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the mother
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of nature
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • countryside
  • farming
  • urbanization
  • stress-free
  • tight-knit
  • sustainable
  • subsistence
  • technological sophistication
  • professional advancement
  • quality of life
  • romanticize
  • ancestral
  • industrial revolution
  • agrarian
  • nostalgic
  • diversification
  • modern conveniences
  • holistic well-being
  • social dynamics
  • longevity
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