In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

In today's high-tech
world
, people are smart enough to know the importance of education. In regards to
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hard fact is that there are several people who are highly educated, with full of skills, well enough competent,
however
without a
job
for a longer time. In accordance with
this
, as per my view, there are multiple aspects that might have
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unemployment
situation. Before starting with the causes, would like to highlight that people
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well aware that without having a good education, it will be very challenging to stand against others in
this
competitive
world
. By keeping that into consideration, nowadays majority public, either male or female pursue a high level of education.
Additionally
, if required they go overseas and obtain higher degrees.
To begin
with the causes,
First
and foremost, high level of competition.
For example
, behind one
job
application only for a single position, there could be more than 100 applicants and out of those you need to be best to grab that
job
offer.
Furthermore
, if you are unable to win
this
race that could be one of the reasons for not getting a
job
.
Secondly
, many times it happens that candidates do not come across their desire
job
, wherein some jobs might be underskilled or out of interest for them.
Therefore
they do not wish to go for some cases.
Additionally
, in today's digital
world
, there are high technologies that have replaced humans with Robots/ or machines, so
that is
another significant reason for
unemployment
.
Subsequently
, due to poor market conditions, many companies retrench their employees
as a result
of
unemployment
.
Moreover
, the
world
is facing a tough time for
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two decades. Nowadays "Recession and Retrench" word is very common,
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is
also
crucial
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element of not having a
job
.
Last
but not least, the company needs specific/ special talents, they want to hire best, so that could be an addition in
this
topic. Every problem has a solution. We can decrease the
unemployment
rate effectively, by enhancing or upgrading ourselves with value-added courses or specialized certifications. I strongly believe that
this
is one of the best ways to grab a good
job
as per your desire. By
this
means, employees can perform up to the mark at
workplace
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and secure their
job
with rewards. Apart from that government should come up with a fresh graduate employment programme. Wherein, they should offer a
job
by following proper selection criteria.
Besides
,that there are several other ways to increase the employment rate. In summary, would like to mention that at end of the day, it's individual's accountability to upgrade themselves and have good grasping in the corporate
world
. To conclude, along with hard work, smart work is
iequally
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equally
important.
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