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In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

#countries #graduates #employment #factors #situation
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In today's high-tech
world
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, people are smart enough to know the importance of education. In regards to
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 hard fact is that there are several people who are highly educated, with full of skills, well enough competent,
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 without a
job
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 for a longer time. In accordance with
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, as per my view, there are multiple aspects that might have
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unemployment
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 situation. Before starting with the causes, would like to highlight that people
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 well aware that without having a good education, it will be very challenging to stand against others in
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 competitive
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. By keeping that into consideration, nowadays majority public, either male or female pursue a high level of education.
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, if required they go overseas and obtain higher degrees.
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 with the causes,
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 and foremost, high level of competition.
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, behind one
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 application only for a single position, there could be more than 100 applicants and out of those you need to be best to grab that
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 offer.
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, if you are unable to win
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 race that could be one of the reasons for not getting a
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.
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, many times it happens that candidates do not come across their desire
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, wherein some jobs might be underskilled or out of interest for them.
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 they do not wish to go for some cases.
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, in today's digital
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, there are high technologies that have replaced humans with Robots/ or machines, so
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 another significant reason for
unemployment
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.
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, due to poor market conditions, many companies retrench their employees
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 of
unemployment
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.
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, the
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 is facing a tough time for
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last
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 two decades. Nowadays "Recession and Retrench" word is very common,
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that
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 is
also
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crucial
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 element of not having a
job
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.
Last
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 but not least, the company needs specific/ special talents, they want to hire best, so that could be an addition in
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 topic. Every problem has a solution. We can decrease the
unemployment
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 rate effectively, by enhancing or upgrading ourselves with value-added courses or specialized certifications. I strongly believe that
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 is one of the best ways to grab a good
job
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 as per your desire. By
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 means, employees can perform up to the mark at
workplace
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 and secure their
job
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 with rewards. Apart from that government should come up with a fresh graduate employment programme. Wherein, they should offer a
job
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 by following proper selection criteria.
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 ,that there are several other ways to increase the employment rate. In summary, would like to mention that at end of the day, it's individual's accountability to upgrade themselves and have good grasping in the corporate
world
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. To conclude, along with hard work, smart work is
iequally
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equally
 important.
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