Wild animals have no place in the 21st century and protection of wild animal is waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Although
there are
myriad
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of certain
species
that are about to extinct, it has been believed that it is not needed to care about it and waste resources in their preservation.
However
, I completely refute the argument, as, if the wildlife is in danger,
then
it might have serious
repurcussions
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repercussions
on mankind eventually.
To begin
with, the failure in
protection
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of endangered animals will simply result in human defeat to preserve the ecosystem. Taking an example of snakes, it's a fact that they are termed as farmer's
friend
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because of
a
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critical role they play in making farmlands
furtile
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futile
fertile
, if these animals are completely extinct,
then
the subsequent generations need to put explicit efforts in order to replace implicit duties of
such
animals. Needless to say,
its
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highly important to save wildlife.
Furthermore
, the continued
occurance
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occurrence
of
such
events in which certain
species
are getting extinct day-by-day might result in even more detrimental effects on
entire
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ecosystem. According to environmental studies, everyone including mammals are an integral part of
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the food-chain
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food-chain
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food chain
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that is
the
dependancy
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dependency
dependence
of
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one
species
on
the
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another for their nourishment. The loss of any participant in it will certainly cause the breakage.
For instance
, when the pollinators
are completely vanished
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, the plants would not be able to produce fruits and seeds on which mankind have great
dependancy
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dependency
for their habitat. The lesser the plant seeds generated, the lesser germination of new vegetation and
their
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yeild
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yield
years
yields
.
Consequently
, an important survival
factors
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of mankind is completely at risk. To wind up, the resources used in the protection of endangered
species
should be seen
an
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important investment since
,
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it is bound to provide considerable returns irrespective of the era.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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