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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed became of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationship people make? Has this became a positive or negative development?

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development
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 of
technology
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,the way
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 communicate with each other has changed significantly.I believe
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 has
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positive
 and detrimental impacts on
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relationships
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the relationships
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 we make.
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 of all,
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technology
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the technology
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 of communication affects
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intimate
relationships
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 in the most obvious ways.
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, the approach we adopt to reach our beloved
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 had changed a lot ,
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 ,from writing letters to making calls and using Facetime.
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,
people
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's interaction with their colleagues and superiors had transformed tremendously along with the changes
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technology
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.Nowadays, the majority of
people
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 is equipped with personal cellphones,which gives
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power to employers. Meaning they are capable of contacting their employees anywhere
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anytime
.
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,there are several changes in
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the communication
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 of consulting -and -
service related
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 fields.
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,
people
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 can gain
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the information
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 they need by consulting on the phone and
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search
 them online.
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,errands like booking tickets ,making medical
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appointments
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 and so on can be done in homes. I would argue that there
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 both
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positive
 and negative
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relationships
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 along with the transformation of
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.On the
one
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 hand,we can benefit a lot from it,
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,
people
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 can keep close contact with their family and friends even in different time zones or separated countries.With the help of
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,
people
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 are able to bond with their loved
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.
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,
on the other hand
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,
technology
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 is way too
accessable
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accessible
 and convenient to everyone so that
people
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 from work have easy
acess
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access
 to reach their colleagues, which definitely have adverse impacts on
one
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's mental and physical health.
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,working-class
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 are very likely to struggle to balance their work and personal life. In conclusion, it is true that the
development
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 of
technology
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 has affected
relationships
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 we make in many ways.And I believe that there are both pros and cons impacts on that
development
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.
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