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Some people think that cars are the best way to travel in a city, while others think that bicycles are better. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 adventurous part of everyone,s life. Travelling is easy via car, public transport, motorbikes or
bicycles
.Some
people
 think that cars are the best and convenient source of travelling while few thinking
bicycles
 are good options. Here, in
this
 essay, I will illustrate both views. On the one hand,
public
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are
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 in support of cars because
its
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a very convenient and time savings vehicle. As we could see it's quite tough to manage the time between work and social life or personal life so cars are just
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easiest medium to make adjustments as one can finish work and
then
 travel to family in few minutes.
Moreover
, the whole family can travel by
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car very easily while it is very hard on
bicycles
 as well it's comfortable to sit and good in any kind of weather while travelling.
On the other hand
, few
people
 opine that
bicycles
 are much better than any other because it's all way very healthy way of travelling and it makes a person fit and active who drives it.
Furthermore
,
bicycles
 are a great contribution to the environment as there is no noise and air pollution while using the cycle.
Additionally
,
bicycles
 are affordable to any kind of
people
 so if everyone will give priority to cycles
then
 maybe there will be
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 reduction of partiality between poor and rich. Overall, it can be observed from
this
 essay that both vehicles have their own importance as their own way so
people
 should just try to adapt that thing which can contribute to the country as well.
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