Children find it difficult to concentrate on or pay attention to their studies in school. What are the reasons? How can we solve this problem?

Not being able to focus on the class is one of the inherent characteristics of
children
in their learning journeys. In my point of view,
this
can attribute to two main reasons: mismatched learning
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and
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of
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industry.
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article will explain the reasons and give corresponding solutions. It is irrefutable that we learn differently. Some obtain knowledge through
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a lot while others prefer to listen to lectures.
However
, there is a prevalence among most of the countries nowadays,
such
that
children
are taught in the same way.
In other words
, schools today fail to provide every student
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environment that
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to learning.
Consequently
, since
children
dislike what is imposed on them, they no longer pay attention to the classes in school.
Furthermore
, considering the advance
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technology,
game
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industry is thriving nowadays.
As a result
, mobile
games
are creeping into our daily life.
Consequently
, since more toddlers are more
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to play rather than study,
such
games
might act as a strong distraction in
children
’s studies.
However
, things are more complicated in the
first
case than
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second
one. In the
first
case, in order to keep
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concentrate, we must make them enjoy the environment of learning at school.
In other words
, we must encourage and help every child to develop a learning style that fit the most.
This
involves long time communication with parents and teachers. In the
second
case, on one hand, parents must control the amount of time that their
children
have spent on mobile or computer
games
thereby minimize the negative influence that
such
games
have on toddlers.
On the other hand
,
game
companies should introduce
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system
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to prevent
children
from playing
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highly addictive
games
like PUBG and CSgo. To conclude, the unfitted learning style and the development of electronic
games
are the major
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contribute
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to poor focus in class. Parents and
game
companies should do their best to help.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distraction
  • Concentration
  • Engagement
  • Curriculum
  • Attention span
  • Learning disorders
  • Interactive learning
  • Personalized learning
  • Supportive learning environment
  • Mental health
  • Organizational skills
  • Educational policy
  • Mindfulness
  • Screen time
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