In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes occurring? Do you think these changes are positive or negative?

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It has been suggested that the topic for discussion, recently, the roles, obligations, structure have altered. I desire to discuss several possible changes and positive points.

To begin

with, as a matter of fact, in

this

day and age the family structure and role can be differed by people than in the past. I believe that there are

some

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various changes.

Firstly

females

' number working

develop

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develops

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than other time. I believe that there are some linking points as a pattern, knowledge and

tecnology

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technology

have been making progress,

in addition

females

make an effort to utilize from their own abilities, skilling, talent and others.

In addition

, I have read that from various books and blogs educated

women

's number was less than men.

In addition

females

weren't let for working by more family,

nevertheless

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this

situation

have

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been abolished than before time.

Secondly

women

right

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rights

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or laws have been

affirmeded

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affirmed

by more countries, both international and national organizations. In fact,

women

and men have become the same rights.

Females

can be selected duties, getting

educate

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education

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, salary, income and so on. Let us take a look at the positive points.

First

of all, the outlay can be shared by the family and a man's hardships

dropp

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drop

dropped

from the top level to the down level.

a good side, more chances can be created by the family for the future, children and the others.

Finally

, people become more social and to consider to one more than in the past.

Weight

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everything into consideration, I want

reaffirming

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to reaffirm

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this

altering and the roles are

seperated

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separated

by people better.

Also

this

situation assists that

women

don't depend on(from) men.

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Modern family
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Nuclear family
Same-sex parent families
Breadwinner
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Cohabitation
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In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes occurring? Do you think these changes are positive or negative?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people think that large, impressive buildings are important for a city. Others believe that the money should be spent on improving schools and hospitals.

There is too much noise in many public places in cities. What are the causes of this problem? What can be done to solve the problem?

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives.

Some people sat that it is a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and/or weekends. Other people think it is important to keep working life completely separate from social life. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

Many people feel it is a waste of money to try to save endangered animal species, for example the tiger or the blue whale. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?