IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 8.5

Your local newspaper published an advertisement asking people to offer time for local environmental initiatives in your area. Write a letter to the project manager to offer your help. In your letter: * Describe a local volunteer project that you are passionate about * Explain what you would like to do to help * Suggest how to gather more support for the cause

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Dear Sir/Madam, I have learned from the advertisement which was published
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 Monday in our local newspaper that you are seeking suitable time and assistance for performing an environmentally-friendly activity. I am writing to let you know that I am interested in joining the initiative. It is a great idea to collect garbage from the parks in our city. Since many times my daughter and I do the same work in our free time, I am confident to lead a group.
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, I can guide them to some affected locations which need immediate action. We can start
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 nice initiative on the national clean weather day in the coming month.
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, I can ask one of my friends who is a designer to design a nice poster for
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 event.
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 I will request my brother who is a publisher to print 100 copies of the poster to install around the city. Please let me know if I can be of more help. Best regards ZM

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task achievement
Your response is well-structured and addresses all points of the task prompt effectively. However, consider adding a little more detail about your previous experience with such initiatives.
coherence cohesion
Your letter is coherent and flows well, but be mindful of minor phrasing issues. For example, 'national clean weather day' should ideally be 'National Clean Air Day' if that is what you are referring to.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriately formal and well-phrased, which enhances the professional tone of the letter.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph has a single clear idea, which helps in maintaining coherence and readability.
logical structure
The logical structure is good, with each part of the letter flowing naturally into the next, making it easy to follow.
suitable writing tone
Your writing tone is suitable for the purpose of the letter. It comes across as polite and earnest, making your offer of help seem genuine.
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