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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
An argumentation said that, currently,
people
 have countless choices about anything than in the past. I strongly agree with
this
 notion in terms of choice of product, because nowadays the technology has been improved vastly and the production of something becomes easier and faster compared to the condition in the previous decade.
Moreover
,
people
 tend to have a consumerism behaviour that encourages factories to produce more assorted goods. The significant improvement of technology in
this
 globalization era results in effectiveness and efficiency in human lives, including producing something. New machines had been created and have been used worldwide to make a production process easy and effective.
Moreover
, it will cost cheaper if they create the goods in large amounts.
Therefore
, the
products
 become massively produce in various types, functions, and models. It makes consumers have many choices regarding the colour, types, size, shape, and purpose of the
products
.
Furthermore
, many choices and easy life nowadays have made
people
 love shopping compared to the past.
This
 consumerism behaviour inspires the company to create more things with more variants.
Besides
, with the assistance of a machine and an automatic process of doing something, the cost will reduce and be cheaper, and the time-consuming process will be shortened.
Thus
, the number of options for
products
 will be more significant. In conclusion, the development of technologies and
people
’s buying something results in more options of
products
 in the current days than in the previous decades when
people
 do anything manually and conventionally without machines.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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