Some people say that excessive noise should be a criminal offense, while others say they should be free to make noise without limitation. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some individuals think that
people
making high
noise
should be punished. Whilst,
other
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others
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believe that residents must be allowed to make high pitch sounds
freely
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.
This
essay agrees with the
first
statement because it disturbs the social environment and affects health. On the
first
hand, several say that
the
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government laws must be made to punish those making strong noises.
That is
to, say because sounds that are highly disturbing affect the physical health of
people
.
Furthermore
,
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people
do have problems with
hearts
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their hearts
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.
Therefore
,
such
noises make their life more difficult. Personally, the environment around
people
is extremely frustrating. Citizens are not able to live peacefully with disruptions.
For example
, in India, numerous weddings happen every day. So, organisers of
such
programs use
music
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a music
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system
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to enjoy the day.
However
, individuals living near
to
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areas suffer a lot due to sounds created by speakers.
On the other hand
, some argue that there should be no restrictions and they must be allowed to make unlimited
noise
. They think that listening to the music and generating maximum
noise
allow
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them to release their true emotions. I believe that
above
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acts may sound selfish as they disturb
people
over their happiness. The government can make strict rules to stop
offenses
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offences
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.
For instance
, in many states including Delhi. It is a criminal
offense
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offence
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if
people
are found screaming after 10 pm. In conclusion, many comments that strict law must be enacted to stop
violence
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the violence
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of
noise
. Still, some argue that citizens should be given chances to make high sounds. As it helps them to overcome stress and tension. But,
this
essay strongly agrees with
first
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point.
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