Do you agree that individuals are responsible for their own happiness or it depends on the factors of the person's life?

The bar chart illustrates the outcome of a study about purchasing and drinking habits of both tea and
coffee
by inhabitants(in percentages) in five different Australian cities during the
last
4 weeks. Overall, it can be seen that Melbourne accounted for the largest
proportion
of people who
prefered
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prefer
to have
coffee
and tea in cafes during the whole period, whereas Briston, as well as
Adelaid
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Adelaide
equally showed the least
proportion
of people purchasing fresh
coffee
. With regard to buying fresh
coffee
, during the
last
28 days, Brisbane and Adelaide had the lowest
proportion
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coffee
buyers at just under 35%.
By contrast
, the figure for purchasing fresh
coffee
was highest in Sydney(around 44%) among all 5 cities. Turning to instant
coffee
, Hobart ranked the
first
in selling
such
coffee
with having almost 55%
residents
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of residents
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buying it, whereas that of Sydney was the lowest at approximately 44%. Concerning dwellers choosing cafes to have either tea or
coffee
during the
last
4 weeks, the figures for Melbourn and Hobart were the highest at around 64% and 63%, respectively.
Conversely
, the
proportion
of residents in Adelaide was the lowest at just below 50%
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