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People these days watch TV, films and other programmes alone rather than with other people. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is no doubt that
food
 plays a critical role in our lives. Many still prefer to cook at
home
 since it is cheaper and healthier.
However
, some people choose to purchase prepared
food
 either because they do not have enough cooking skills or want to save their
time
. Many people believe that buying ready
food
 in
restaurants
 and grocery shops is risky for one’s health.
This
 is because the vast majority of it is made from unhealthy and unknown ingredients; eating
such
meals
 every day could lead to obesity and other health problems.
In addition
, it is usually more expensive to purchase
food
 in
restaurants
 compared to cooking at
home
. If you eat daily in
restaurants
, there is a high chance of ending up without any savings and money for other basic needs.
Although
 eating ready
meals
 can be harmful, it may be convenient because it helps one to save tons of
time
.
For instance
,
food
 delivery companies,
such
 as Doordash and Uber Eats, have made it possible to order a meal from your favourite restaurant at a moderate price.
As a result
, you do not have to spend hours at the stove and can invest
this
time
 in more pleasant activities, like reading.
Furthermore
, it may be impossible to cook specific
meals
 at
home
. Going to a restaurant allows you to eat an unusual and delicious dish from a foreign cuisine, which you would not normally cook at
home
. In conclusion, despite being threatening to your health and budget, buying
food
 in
restaurants
 allows you to spend your
time
 more productively and eat unique and complex
meals
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personal freedom
  • compromise
  • negotiate
  • viewing preferences
  • enhanced focus
  • immerse
  • understanding
  • appreciation
  • independent decision-making
  • autonomy
  • personal responsibility
  • isolation
  • social disconnection
  • loneliness
  • shared viewing experiences
  • bonding opportunities
  • collective experience
  • discussions
  • communal aspect
  • screen time
  • physical and mental health
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