Everyday, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think it is happening and how can we resolve the problem?

Dear Shailesh, I am overjoyed by receiving the letter and hearing from you after so long. Thank you for feeling me be considerate to ask for a piece of advice.
Music
and management both are different types of subjects. Business Management has become vital in all fields these days. By learning that, you can learn about how to develop and build an organization from scratch,
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, begin your own start-up as well.
On the other hand
,
music
tends to give joy and entertainment to the public. People listen to it for many purposes
such
as meditation, sole relaxation, and for that, they are going for
such
music
therapies as well. The emerging craze for concerts and live
music
sessions in today's youth has made it
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faster. You have been an excellent piano player since you were five and considering your love for
music
from childhood, I would suggest you
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lend your selection towards
music
. It is a never-ending field so it can benefit you to finance yourself easily. Hoping to hear from you soon. Yours lovingly, Nisarg Patel
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