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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Unlike olden days
people
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 all around the world try to get accustomed to a new
language
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 in order to communicate effectively. While some argue that educating themselves with a new foreign dialect is only relevant in an organization or when travelling. Whereas another group state that
language
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 should be learned for other intentions too. The following essay will decipher both the viewpoints and convey my opinion.
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, it is obvious that
language
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 has become a mandatory criterion in many occupations for a job. Since a lot of
people
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 seek jobs in foreign companies, it has become indispensable for them to learn it. One clear example is Germany which requires
people
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 who intend to work in
this
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 country requires them to master the German dialect.
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, for conducting long abroad trips a vast majority of individuals learn different languages in order to indulge themselves in the local communities as well as get the
first
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-hand experience of the culture of various countries that they fly.
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 most
people
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 do not make any effort to grasp a new
language
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 other for travelling and employment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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