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In many countries people do not recycle waste materials, such as bottles and newspapers. What are the reasons for this? What could be done to solve this problem?

#countries #people #waste #materials #bottles #newspapers
Recycling
of
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waste materials is one of the effective
method
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methods
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 to control environmental pollution. Hordes of
people
are not included
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have not included
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the
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in the
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 recycling
process
 as part of their
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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 which would be much harmful
for
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 all living beings including mankind. If it continues significantly, It may lead to
destruction
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the destruction
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 of
earth
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the earth
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. The
first
 most reason is, a large number of
people
 are not having awareness
on
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importance
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the importance
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 of recycling.
For example
,
people
 are still using
plastic
 bags and water bottles which are underneath the required quality standards.
Nevertheless
, they throw them away
instead
 of reusing or recycling them.
In addition
 to that,
handful
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 of
people
 throws them
on
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 public places without any shame. To overcome
this
 hurdle, All political parties and celebrities should take
single
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a single
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 stand on
this
 statement and should impose fines for those who toss
plastic
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the plastic
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 waste in public places.
Consequently
,
government
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the government
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 has to promote advertisements with celebrities and
to
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conduct events to bring awareness
in
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people
.
On the other hand
,
Government
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the Government
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 is not encouraging their citizens and startup businesses towards
recycling
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the recycling
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process
 which is why there is not even a single
government
 order released that supports
this
process
. To tackle
this
 situation,
government
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the government
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 must propose the benefits like subsidy and tax exemptions which plays
key
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a key
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 role to take
this
process
 to
next
 level of achievement. By
this
,
atleast
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at least
 small-scale companies can come up with creative ideas to collect the
plastic
 garbage and may produce something profitable from recycled
platsic
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plastic
. It seems to me that,
people
 should follow
recycling
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the recycling
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process
 which is
a
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 best way to control environmental pollution. Despite
of
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this
,
government
 and citizens should be more responsible towards the usage of
plastic
 materials along with its resuing and
recylcing
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recycling
process
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • apathy
  • environmental impact
  • passive attitude
  • recycling infrastructure
  • sustainability
  • accessible
  • disposing
  • awareness
  • participate
  • incentivizing
  • motivate
  • tangible
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