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In many societies in the world, the population is ageing rapidly and this is leading to an unsustainable increase in the cost of public healthcare. A nation’s population should pay for their healthcare provision in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It has been a
hotly-debated
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 topic that if citizens of a country ought to be taxed for the medical
services
 that will be faced when they will have retired. In my point of
views
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, taxpayers have to be benefited whenever now or later on since they have given great contribution to
the
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society as part of their gains for working. As
healthcare
services
 are essential to the elderly, the
governemnt
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government
 has to subsidise
for
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it
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them
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. And where
does
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 those pounds come from? Of
course
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 they are from the pockets of the individuals!
Therefore
, the ones who will be using the
services
 should
had
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 been charged when they were employees. To be
specifically
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, the more likely the people will be in need
for
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such
services
, the
much
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more
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 tax that they have to be imposed
to
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in order to balance the budgets of the government.
Nevertheless
, it is not easy for a public sector organisation to account for the exact quantities of medical
services
 that one will use in the future of above 20 years later.
Such
 extrapolation requires the government to have collected
sufficient
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 amount of data
of
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 the citizens' general
health
 for statistical purposes. Unfortunately, not many
health
 authorities can have access to all the citizens'
health
 data sets just because there are plenty of private
healthcare
 providers who do not have the responsibility to share their patients'
health
 information with.
Furthermore
, it is
argueably
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arguably
arguable
 that whether the
unpriviledged
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unprivileged
privileged
 should not be required to afford as much as those wealthy
personnels
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personnel
 in the overall funding of the
healthcare
services
. If we look deeper,
this
 issue might contribute to the income inequalities as well as wealth gaps in a region, and
hence
 leads to unstableness and unsustainable
developemnt
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development
 of the economy. In conclusion, the foundation of a country's
healthcare
 system matters a lot when the parliament is considering
to impose
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 more charges to the current taxpayers for the medical
services
 that they might be using in the future.
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