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Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#trend #reports #media #focus #emergencies #development #people #individuals #society
It has been observed that these days
news
reports
 are more focused upon
issues
 and
crisis
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instead
 of reporting on
productive
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 growth. Some individuals believe that
this
 might lead to
negative
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a negative
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effect
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 on
people
 and in turn to
the
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society
. I believe that
media
 is a mirror to
the
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society
 and it should report what is happening in
the
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society
 be it positive or negative.
News
 and
media
is
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 the shadow of what happens around us. It can be positive or negative. If they only report on positive development,
people
 will never know about the
issues
 and problems happening around them. If the population will know the problems, they might be able to help in containing those problems by lending a helping hand.
For example
, if the
news
reports
 of
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 number of covid-19 cases in the country in March 2020 have not come out,
people
 might not have become diligent and started wearing masks.
On the other hand
,
people
 in
United
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 States suffered heavily because of misleading
reports
 by
media
 that the virus will go away during summers and
its
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 just
a flu
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the flu
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 with nothing to be worried about.
On the other hand
, if
people
 only hear about
reports
 of crime and
issues
, it might lead them to feel unsafe when they are outside of the comfort of their home.
This
 can lead to
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effect
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 on the mental health of individuals.
This
 may lead to
poeple
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people
 taking matters into their own hands and forget about law and order. One
such
exampe
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example
 is in
United
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 States, where we keep hearing
news
 about
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a mass
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shooting
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shootings
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, where
people
 after getting angry over certain
issues
 around them carried out
mass
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shooting
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.
This
 can
also
 lead to
people
 feeling disenchanted and leaving their countries. In my opinion,
media
 is supposed to show what is happening in
the
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society
 be it good or bad. But if the bad far outweighs the good,
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 it shouldn't stop the
news
 channels from showing it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pessimistic outlook
  • exposed to negative news
  • stress and anxiety
  • success stories
  • balanced reporting
  • well-informed public
  • rational decisions
  • sense of helplessness
  • apathy
  • skew public perception
  • mistrust in institutions
  • enhance well-being
  • mental health
  • manipulate public opinion
  • serve specific agendas
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