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Now-a-days celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than their achievement, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is clearly evident that celebrities are becoming more popular for their
beauty
 and wealth rather than their
achivements
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achievements
achievement
. If we look
in to
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 the field of cinema, actors are giving priority to the roles that
involves
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beauty
 rather than a good role or a
responsible
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response
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 message. Even the cricketers are not playing to the mark to achieve something for their country,
instead
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 they are concentrating more on
adverstisement
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advertisement
advertisements
 which earn them money and bring fame to their
beauty
. In
this
 day and time, actors are concentrating more on their glamour. Even the movies that portray a specific message to the public are been very few,
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may be
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 so we can count them on fingers. The more glamour they exhibit the more popularity they gain,
this
 has been
key
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 point that many actors are believing. Even the directors are portraying their stories in
this
 manner to attract people.
This
 is turning out to have a bad effect on
the
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young people. They are entering
in to
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 a stage of dilemma that glamour and wealth are more important to earn name and popularity.
Instead
 of procuring education that can help them to achieve their goals, they are being diverted with the illusion that money can bring everything to them.
Additionally
, the lifestyle that celebrities are exhibiting through their posts
in
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 social media
are
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 attracting
the
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young people to force their parents to provide them with that lifestyle. To sum up, celebrities need to convey
the
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 youth that it is not the money and
beauty
 that will bring popularity, education needs to be given higher priority in order to achieve goals in life, which in turn will help in leading a successful life. Teachers in the school have to guide the students not to believe in the false interpretation and make them realize that it is not those factors
which
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 make them popular.
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