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In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment.What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it

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In many ,countries significant numbers of skilled
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 have been facing unemployment issues.The essay will discuss the
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 problems including overpopulationsociety and economic crises. The dissertation will
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 suggest solutions including controlling the population and increment in
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opportunities
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 by public and private sectors. In my opinion, policies ought to be set up by the government authorities with adjoining ventures with private sectors to enhance jobs in the market. A significant number of skilled
workers
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 have to face the rising problem of unemployment. One of the
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 is overpopulation, with a limited number of
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 leads to many skilled
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 being jobless.
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, economic crises caused many
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 to lose their jobs.
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, the economic crisis in 2008, caused a recession in the market and made many skilled
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 to be sacked, which made them unwaged.
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, these are some
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 behind the unemployment in the nation. Controlling the overpopulationculture and initiating the policies to enhance
job
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opportunities
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 are major solutions to mitigate these obstacles. The authorities have to run an awareness program through a high profile spokesman to spread a message about disadvantages about higher communities in a nation. Another example is the government should encourage the discussion with developed countries regarding the opening of their offices in underdeveloped nations
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 because the rise in the number of multinational companies will lead to an increase in
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opportunities
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.These
reasons
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 lead to control the current problem of jobless people. To conclude, it seems logical to accept that joblessness is the biggest challenge among youngsters.
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 discussed the solutions to these problems are twofold; controlling population and enhancing
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opportunities
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