some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries but other think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen on TV and internet discuss both view and give your opinion.

It is often opined that whether visiting other
country
gives you a better
experience
or staying in your
country
and gather information about any
country
through internet or television is enough to collect knowledge. There are many views on both sides. I will discuss both the postulates along with my rationale associated with appropriate exemplification in the subsequent paragraph. At the outset , some
people
think that physical
experience
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evident impact on human's memory that lasts for a long time.
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, a report published in The Times Of India
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illustrated that 89% of
people
who visited foreign had remembered toured
country
's culture clearer than those who gained information via networking sites.
Additionally
, most
people
also
agreed that only visited
to
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the
perticular
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particular
place which is famous for their
cusions
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cushions
, you can
experience
the
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exquisite
taste of their cultural dishes, rather than reading about them. For quintessentially, an article published in The Folk
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magazine
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stated that in 2014, 39%
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tourist
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travel to the
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Thailand
only to taste their famous dish
that is
susi.
On the contrary
, many
people
are in the favour of not travelling to another
country
because nowadays travelling to foreign premises is quite
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expensive
and it is unworthy for them to travel to gain the information which is already available on
internet
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the internet
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as well on television.
For Example
, a survey conducted by The Ministery of Foreign
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demonstrated that 27%
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quit their travelling to foreign because of high
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expenses
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expences
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.
Furthermore
, some think that going to another continent consume lots of time which they can utilize in doing other
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. To illustrate, A survey conducted by The Hindustan Times stated that 16%
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agreed that they had saved their time by not touring and they
also
had knowledge about others countries
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through networking sites.
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it is conspicuous that for the better and evident knowledge of any
country
's culture one should visit
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that
country
,
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because only reading can not give you the
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exquisite
excuse
experience
of that particular continent which stay with you life long.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immersive
  • interactions
  • virtual means
  • cultural nuances
  • language acquisition
  • problem-solving
  • adaptability
  • sustainability
  • virtual tours
  • documentaries
  • sophisticated
  • realistic representations
  • comprehensive understanding
  • financial status
  • carbon footprint
  • digital resources
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