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All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

#cars #fuels
It has been considered that electric cars should be used
instead
 of
burn
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burnt
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 fossil fuel
car
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cars
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. I believe that by doing
this
 change we would be helping our planet.
First
 of all, electric cars are more environmentally friendly than fossil fuel cars.
Which
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 means,
less
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fewer
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 pollutants
been
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have been
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 release
to
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into
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 our atmosphere and
reduction
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a reduction
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of
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in
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 global warming. But replacing it we would be producing less carbon dioxide into our planet, helping us live
in
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on
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 a healthier planet.
Furthermore
, the reduction of pollutants results in
decreased
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of
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apply
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environmental
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the environmental
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 impact caused by pollution. As studies
has
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 shown that in the same distance driven an electric
car
 would cause less impact
in
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on
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 our environment than a fossil fuel
car
.
In addition
,
electric
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the electric
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car
 is most likely to come with
an
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artificial intelligence which could improve our safety on the roads.
Consequently
, reducing accidents on the road as it has a system that can identify when there are any changes on the road.
Finally
, based on what I have
seeing
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this
 change would not just help our environment but would
also
 make our roads a safer place.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • air pollution
  • greenhouse gases
  • climate change
  • sustainable
  • renewable
  • electric vehicles
  • battery technology
  • charging infrastructure
  • range anxiety
  • government support
  • incentives
  • subsidies
  • renewable energy
  • environmental impact
  • energy efficiency
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