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Learning in a group discussion is exceedingly valuable than doing it alone and by depending on technology.

#group #discussion #technology
Firstly
, group discussion advances your thought because it
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understanding the subjects
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 groups.
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, those students who have perfected and have experiences train the rest of the students to be able to tackle the questions. For, example research was done by the
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 of Nairobi indicate that 80% of those who study in group discussion perform
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 as they have no difficulties in answering the exam questions.
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, you remain focused and enjoy the study.
Therefore
 it is crucial to get involved in group discussion as it has proved to be the most beneficial in aiding
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 in education.
Secondly
, technology
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 assisted
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 to learn from home as there is no excuse for not attending classes as there is flexibility and time management. In, addition it
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 self-motivation by setting priorities and
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 learning condition. A study was done by a Nairobi university
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 show that 90% of
student
 prefers learning online. In a
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 technology is changing our normal way of doing things
thus
 there is no option but to run with it.
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 learning online is trending as
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 now can learn at their comfort. Inclusion, learning has tremendously become easier with technology while it is
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 added merit to institutions without classes to handle many
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 as they can now do virtual studies.
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