It's important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

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There are several stages in a child's life and growth and one
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the most important
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is the development of conscience, which is the ability to diagnose
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and wrong. I totally consent
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idea that
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need to understand
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or wrong, but I strongly believe that the idea
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is not working at all, especially physical
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. For the
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to learn about a good or bad deed, they must have a role model.
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are reflections of adults especially their
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and close family.
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, to teach them
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and wrong
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should be great role models as the
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only reflect their
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behavior
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.
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,
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can have opposite consequences, especially physical
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. Very young
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like infants do not understand the reason they are punished, because they can't distinguish good or bad yet.
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, other methods can be used like withdrawal of a
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a favourite
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, and time-out. The
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should fit the crime, it must make them avoid doing wrong things like throwing
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garbage, or fighting with friends and siblings, and cleaning their rooms after a messy play. When
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are aware of the consequences of their deeds and actions, they would never use
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as a teaching method for their young
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, they behave consciously and thoughtfully to raise them and teach them wrong and
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On the other hand
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, those
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and teachers who use
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as a way of educating young
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will observe the adverse consequences in both short-term and
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, which harms the
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significantly. So
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, when they grow up to be adults, they will use
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same bad method to raise their kids.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Moral development
  • Positive reinforcement
  • Negative reinforcement
  • Behavioral psychology
  • Disciplinary methods
  • Corporal punishment
  • Psychological effects
  • Authoritative parenting
  • Permissive parenting
  • Behavioural correction
  • Ethical considerations
  • Legal frameworks
  • Cognitive development
  • Social norms
  • Character building
  • Restorative practices
  • Authoritarian approach
  • Constructive criticism
  • Pro-social behavior
  • Conditioning
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