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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can government do to help reduce this amount of rubbish produced

#rubbish #government #amount
Looking for a modern world, there are a lot of companies that producing rubbish. And it is certainly true that today's lifestyle has become so insensitive and uncivil
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 ever. The level of garbage produced by us is growing every day.
However
, every single thing in the world has a reason. A reason to destroy the Earth. According to
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recent research, our planet is mired in
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. Birds, animals and fish are dying right now because of us and our disgusting lifestyle. The number of people living on Earth is constantly growing up, which means that waste from humans
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 increasing too. Humanity
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 to
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 everything, but after that we just cut down trees, kill animals and pollute the surrounding area.
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 part of us
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 not even know anything about ecology and how to use special eco-bags for saving our motherland. Perhaps, mankind should try to talk more about things like that. Incineration may
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 like a solution, but it is not.
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 us to
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global air pollution, commensurate with the harm of giant fires (
such
 as a fire in a Taiga in 2019 and fires in Turkey and Yakutia in 2021). The only sane decision in
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 case, from my point of view, is
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 using resources
such
 as plastic and other poorly decomposing materials.
Also
, we need to promote a detailed system of sorting garbage and
this
 should be taken into account from an early age,
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may be
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, at school. To sum up,
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out
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 planet
is slowly lose
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her
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 life because of people. And if
this
 situation would not be stopped, all of us die. Taking care of your home is equal to taking care of yourself.
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