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QUESTION: Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Each year some of the
languages
 are running out of life. A few
people
 think that
this
 is not relevant because life will be simpler if there are
less
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number
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fewer
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 of
languages
 in the world. I totally disagree with
this
 statement because
,
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languages
 are one of the most unique and amazing
feature
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features
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 of a culture or a
place
. In some places, the
language
 represents the area or even the name of the
place
 would
also
 be similar to the
language
 spoken there,
for
instance
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 France one of the renowned
economy
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economies
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 among European countries, the
language
 spoken by
people
is
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in
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 French,
moreover
 English in England, German in Germany and a huge list is coming up if we look
further
 deep into
this
 subject.
A culture
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 or
language
 both represents a
place
’s features and specialities,
futhermore
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furthermore
language
 is pretty much dominant among these. The world is rich in diversities, it conveys
it’s
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its
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 branding. The
people
 speaking French belongs to France,
likewise
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 all other
language
 disappears it is showing that
some
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someplace
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place
 is dying, but it should not happen because that
place
 is losing
it’s
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its
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 signature
in
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inland
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land
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the land
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,
therefore
language
 must be conserved for preserving the value of a
place
. Once a group of
people
 met with a research project based on
languages
 and
it’s
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its
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inflluence
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influence
,
unfortunately
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,unfortunately
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 the team got
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split
splitted
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split
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 up. Later they were reunited for continuing the research and after a long study and
hardworks
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hard work
hard works
 they summed up with
conclusion
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a conclusion
the conclusion
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, it was like a warning to
people
 speaking rare
languages
. In their study they found a relation between time and
languages
, as per their relation highly rare
language
 will vanish within
next
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the next
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 30 years, even the results
was
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were
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 shocking but solutions were discovered. The group claimed that the rarer
language
 speaking
people
 have to make scripts in English about their mother tongue with help of some
translaters
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translators
translation
, by using
this
 remedial method hundreds of
languages
 had been preserved and kept safe. In conclusion, the
languages
which
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that
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 fading should be preserved in one way or
other
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another
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, by keeping these diversities we are saving the world from extinction. Nowadays most
people
 are not aware
about
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 the value of historic elements that have to be or
may be
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maybe
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 the guide of
future
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the future
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.
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