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It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subject. What are the causes? And the effects on society?

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In most of the
nations
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 it is seen that only a few students are inclined towards studying
science
.The main reasons behind
this
 scenario would be the lack of cognitive skills and a sort of fear about that part of
science
 in the population and
consequently
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 the human community is being impacted a lot.The aim of
this
 essay is to elaborate on my opinion. The given scenario is the outcome of the following situations.
Firstly
, not all
the
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people can understand and analyse the theories and mathematical calculations involved in
the
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science
.
Thus
 they feel annoyed when they see those in the
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textbooks
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text books
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.
For instance
, the equations related to magnetism
are not easily get
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 to the minds of ordinary
studens
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students
student
.
Besides
this
, in many
of
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the
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countries
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science
 is always seen as a genius subject from
the
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childhood.
As a result
, people start avoiding it whenever possible. Admittedly, the result of the given scenario is the decrease in the number of scientists from a community.As a consequence, people's interest in the mentioned field will slow down.
For example
, if
many
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 of our elders feel scared about taking a subject we too will obviously avoid it.
Additionally
, the lack of experiments and explorations in the field of
science
 will move
the
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society backwards and
hence
 halts the development of a country. To conclude, the essay has explained the causes for the
occurence
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occurrence
 of the given situation and how is
this
effecting
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 the
developmnt
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development
redevelopment
 of the country.
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  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Math)
  • Perception of difficulty
  • Early exposure
  • Engaging experiences
  • Career opportunities
  • Practical applications
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural norms
  • Critical fields
  • Innovation
  • Economic development
  • Global competitiveness
  • Public health
  • Environmental issues
  • Scientific progress
  • Educational standards
  • Biodiversity loss
  • Healthcare services
  • Medical research
  • Job prospects
  • Research and technology
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