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People think that government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles to solve environmental problems. Give your opinion.

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The world has been suffering from the burning issue of pollution created by different
kind
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 of vehicles. It is believed by some that
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 in fossil
fuel
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price
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 can reduce usages of cars and other conveyances which will impact
environment
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the environment
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 positively. There are both merits and demerits of
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 trend and
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 essay will explain that an increase
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fuel
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 cost is not a proper way to reduce ecological problems. At present crude oil is the main source of
fuel
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.
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increase
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of
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 oil
cost
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 can even worsen the current situation because it is the only reliable gas source.
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, no matter how expensive the oil customers will try to purchase it
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 unless
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 alternative is provided by the government.
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 in taxation for tobacco goods did not reduce its sales and the same will happen with petroleum as well.
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 should impose strict
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 and introduce more public transports, so that general people prefer to use communal transportations
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 of using private cars.
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, Scientists should focus on
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 of alternative energy which can be available in
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is
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 less price that will not impact the surroundings widely.
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, Tesla invented electric cars that can perform with
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an electric
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 power source, which is renewable and
results
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 zero carbon emission.
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 step by step we can eliminate the greenhouse gas release. The outcome will be
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the clean
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 and green atmosphere. In conclusion, all
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 data shows that only
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 the
fuel
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 price will not reduce global warming effects. Some strong alternative measures need to be implemented to tackle the situation.
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