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As a results of tourism and the increasing number of people travelling, there is an growing demand for more flights.what problems does this haveon the environment?what measures could be taken to slove the problem?

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In the 21st century, people extensively travelling one place to another place for understanding the culture of the society.
on the other hand
, it
results
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 growing number of flights,
it
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 will adversely
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 our atmosphere with poisonous contents. In
this
 essay, I will explain the problems and measures related to
this
 statement.
To begin
, air
transportation
 is
detrimend
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detriment
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pollution in our surroundings, whereas the stratosphere regions of
atmosphere
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 increased with carbon monoxide due to oil extreats from flights. Admittedly, more aeroplanes mean more accidents because the recent
statistics
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 data shows the relevant data about
this
 statement.
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,
since
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past
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 five years, there are
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150
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 aeroplanes clashes in our world and most of them are down in the sea,
results
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 more wastages in our oceans. Reportedly, air
pollutionwhich
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pollution which
 will adversely affect global warming and maximize humidity in our earth surface. Apparently, there are many collective measures to reduce
this
 environmental degradation due to air
transportation
.
Firstly
 regulate their travelling and reduce domestic flights minimize the intensity of
this
 problem
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as a result
 people can use
conventional
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the conventional
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 mode of
transportation
 for their continuous needs To illustrate
this
, in India train services are more suitable for
long
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 journey and it it is less expensive
this
 helps domestic travellers to achieve their goals.
Secondly
, use less harmful energy for
transportation
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will help to reduce carbon monoxide in our atmosphere.
Thirdly
,
government
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 should control private helicopters for tourism and they need to motivate public
transportation
 for their
further
 experiments. In conclusion, exploring new things are one of the natural
Instinct
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 of human beings so they will definitely travel more. but keep in mind that nature is the
valuable
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 and the most precious gnomes in one life that we should protect.
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