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As a results of tourism and the increasing number of people travelling, there is an growing demand for more flights.what problems does this haveon the environment?what measures could be taken to slove the problem?

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In the 21st century, people extensively travelling one place to another place for understanding the culture of the society.
on the other hand
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 growing number of flights,
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 will adversely
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 our atmosphere with poisonous contents. In
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 essay, I will explain the problems and measures related to
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, air
transportation
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detrimend
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detriment
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pollution in our surroundings, whereas the stratosphere regions of
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 increased with carbon monoxide due to oil extreats from flights. Admittedly, more aeroplanes mean more accidents because the recent
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 data shows the relevant data about
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past
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 five years, there are
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 aeroplanes clashes in our world and most of them are down in the sea,
results
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 more wastages in our oceans. Reportedly, air
pollutionwhich
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pollution which
 will adversely affect global warming and maximize humidity in our earth surface. Apparently, there are many collective measures to reduce
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 environmental degradation due to air
transportation
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 regulate their travelling and reduce domestic flights minimize the intensity of
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 problem
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as a result
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 people can use
conventional
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 mode of
transportation
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 for their continuous needs To illustrate
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, in India train services are more suitable for
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 journey and it it is less expensive
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 helps domestic travellers to achieve their goals.
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, use less harmful energy for
transportation
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will help to reduce carbon monoxide in our atmosphere.
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government
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 should control private helicopters for tourism and they need to motivate public
transportation
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 for their
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 experiments. In conclusion, exploring new things are one of the natural
Instinct
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 of human beings so they will definitely travel more. but keep in mind that nature is the
valuable
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 and the most precious gnomes in one life that we should protect.

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