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Nowadays plastic money replacements such as credit and debit cards are extremely popular, even more than banknotes and coins but still many countries prefer paper money.

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Recently credit and debit cards are getting more and more popular, so many
people
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 widely prefer plastic
money
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 to banknotes and coins. At the same time. there are some
people
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 who continue to use
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money
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 as an ordinary way to spend cash.
This
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 essay will discuss both points of view before coming to
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 reasoned solution. Obviously, our modern life is changing incredibly fast- there are so many innovations in every industry, which make our life is the more comfortable and financial industry is one of them. There is a group of
people
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 who is not able to see clearly, count properly or somehow do not have the opportunity to check change while they pay for something,
therefore
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 plastic
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 is a great solution for them.
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, it is difficult to use
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money
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 for blind
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 or
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 with some physical disabilities, but using credit cards makes the buying process much easier.
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, there are still many
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 who prefer
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money
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, because of their traditional classic form or simply they think
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 is beautiful. Especially nowadays current banks change old
money
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 regularly and fabricate impressively a greater version
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.
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,
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money
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 which
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 in envelopes is always
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a suitable
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 kind of gift for birthday or wedding in many countries, since
people
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 follow these traditions for many years. To sum up, there is a perfect option if
people
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 have
paper
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money
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 and debit or credit cards as both options. There are so many different situations that always happen so
paper
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money
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 and plastic
money
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 can be equally useful to help in any case.

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