Some people think that students benefit from going to private secondary schools. Others however, feel that private secondary schools can have a negative effect on society as a whole. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Private
schools
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from public
schools
,
this
is the place which we can feel so comfortable . It brings a pleasant learning environment to
student
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students
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.
Hoever
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However
, studying
at
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there is
also
be limited in several aspects .
First
of all , people want to go to private
schools
not
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state
schools
because they feel that they can be
freedom
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and happy , don'
t
be forced to abides
to
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the complex compulsory like state
schools
. From those things , they can easily be negative effect by many factors .
For example
, they always play truant , skip classes , don'
t
be serious in
study
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the study
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even they organise fighting , rapping and using narcotics . Those things could
be badly impact
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on
social
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society
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in the future .
On the other hand
, the tuition fees
is
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high-priced and
doesn'
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don't
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t
suitable for many people whose family finances is not better , It
make
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people don'
t
be treasure their money
although
their level of study is very low .
Summary
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,
beside
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besides
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the negative effect , private
schools
is
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also
have benefits . And if we go to
the
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school that have many good teachers and
merterial
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material
facilities we will get a high result and
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be successful
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successful
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in the future .
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