Some people think that students benefit from going to private secondary schools. Others however, feel that private secondary schools can have a negative effect on society as a whole. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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from public

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is the place which we can feel so comfortable . It brings a pleasant learning environment to

student

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, studying

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there is

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be limited in several aspects .

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of all , people want to go to private

schools

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state

schools

because they feel that they can be

freedom

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and happy , don'

be forced to abides

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the complex compulsory like state

schools

. From those things , they can easily be negative effect by many factors .

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, they always play truant , skip classes , don'

be serious in

study

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even they organise fighting , rapping and using narcotics . Those things could

be badly impact

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social

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in the future .

On the other hand

, the tuition fees

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high-priced and

doesn'

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suitable for many people whose family finances is not better , It

make

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people don'

be treasure their money

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their level of study is very low .

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beside

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the negative effect , private

schools

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also

have benefits . And if we go to

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school that have many good teachers and

merterial

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material

facilities we will get a high result and

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successful

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in the future .

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Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
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Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

211 words

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people think that students benefit from going to private secondary schools. Others however, feel that private secondary schools can have a negative effect on society as a whole. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people believe that the good leaders are born, whereas others hold the opinion that leadership qualities can be obtained during the life.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In the future, all cars, buses, and truck will be driverless

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative

Some young people are leaving the countrside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in the countryside. What problems are caused by this issue? What can be done to solve this situation?