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Some people think that success is the best indicator for intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways. What is your opinion?

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There is a stereotype among
people
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 about the key to
success
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. Some
people
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 believe
success
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 is the only indicator
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intelligence
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.
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, others consider there are other ways to define brilliance.
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 take on
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, I believe that
success
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 is able to be used as a criterion to gauge an individual’s savvy.
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 of all, I believe all successful
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 are intelligent, but not only that. The meaning of
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 that I intend is not necessarily good at academic value,
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, brilliant in other ways.
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,
intelligence
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 to look for opportunities and they are aware of their strengths and weaknesses.
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, having brilliant skills is not enough. We must be hard-working, investing time to develop skills and money as early as possible.
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 is because we can see that a lot of
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 with high degrees find it difficult to get a job without skills and work well nowadays.
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, there are several measurements of
intelligence
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 developed by scientists at the moment – including emotional, spiritual, and intellectual
intelligence
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. Those measurements can be used for
people
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 to achieve their goals,
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 as
people
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 having high scores in intellectual
intelligence
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 but having the lowest scores in emotional
intelligence
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 might not be successful. Because successful
people
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 need the ability to cope with many challenges and adapt in the worst situation in order to achieve
success
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, those
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criteria
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 include emotional
intelligence
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. In conclusion, in order to succeed, we are not only having
intelligence
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 in academic fields, but we need emotional and spiritual
intelligence
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 that might become a factor in how
people
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 can be successful.

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