Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that the number of
male
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and
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must be the same in every
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taught in
university
. In
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I am going to explain why I completely disagree with the statement and
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Firstly
, I believe that there are several subjects to choose
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university
and some
courses
are suitable for
male
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and others for
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females
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, for
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I am a student and I am studying economics and finance where the major of
students
are male because the girls do not want to attend these
courses
because they do not like it. In
contraddiction
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contradiction
, there are some subjects where there are several
female
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females
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for instance
the course which taught how to become a professor is full of
female
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females
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.
Moreover
, in my
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if the
university
try
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to accept the equal number of male and female in every subject the difference of student there will be and so
students
need to choose whatever they want.
Although
the
students
can attend the course they want, in some countries it is impossible for a person to choose what to study, for
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in some
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university
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the girl can not attend
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some
courses
because it is believed that they are more suitable for men. In conclusion, I think that the
students
have to choose the subject they want and the
university
must give the
oppurtunity
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opportunity
to attend each course the student desire without differences between male and female.
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