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In the future, more people choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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in the course of time and And change the items of life, people prefer to spend their
vacation
 in their own
country
 until they
travel
 abroad, so domestic trips have become more popular than foreign ones. I agree with the opinion, and in
this
 essay, I will support my view with an example.
First
 of all, the main issue is
money
 which is an essential factor for
travel
. Foreign
travel
 costs more than a domestic trip, so you have to spend more
money
 on an abroad trip
although
 you can spend half that
money
 in your county on holiday.
For example
, we can not journey abroad because we have to pay at least three or four times the cost of domestic
travel
 for
vacation
.
Next
 point, In some countries there are many tourist attractions. When your
country
 has many
places
 for a holiday, you no longer needed to trip foreign and you prefer to spend the
vacation
 in your
country
. Instance, in turkey, has many tourist cities
such
 as Antalya and Izmir which Antalya and Alaniya are coastal cities, and Izmir is one of the most beautiful cities in turkey.
On the other hand
, most people have enough
money
, but there are few tourist attractions on their estate, so they prefer to go abroad. Like Iran, that person goes to foreign because they do nat many
places
 to spend their
vacation
 or they do not take care of these
places
 correctly
then
 they choose to journey abroad. Inclusion, to reduce the low cost of trips and have many
places
 to spend holidays, the person prefers to
travel
 more in their
country
, but some people have enough
money
; unfortunately, they do not have resorts to spend their
vacation
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic tourism
  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
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