Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The issue
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government
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should spend funds on railroads or highways is a moot point for
people
nowadays, some
people
believe that the roadways are more advantageous than the
railways
. According to my belief,
railways
are
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mode of transportation than any other
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.
Firstly
, allocating public funds in establishing and improving
railways
will decrease the mortality rate as
this
mode of commuting is
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friendly and
it
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releases less carbon dioxide which will reduce diseases like cancer, migraine, respiratory illness etc.
In other words
, the citizens of the nation will enjoy a healthy lifestyle.
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, findings of
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research conducted by Delhi university shows that constructing metro trains have reduced
the
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pollution by 28% and which indirectly has improved
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of
people
.
Secondly
, The development of
railways
have
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impact on the economic development of the nation, it will increase the employment opportunities for the
people
. By making sure that the facility of
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the railway
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is available to everyone the officials should try to build rail tracks in each and every corner of the country.
For instance
, a study in China has revealed that after improving railroads rate of unemployment decreased in developing countries as
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the majority
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of
people
got employed in
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sector which
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to improvement in their way of living. To summarize, the government has to take initiative to develop
railways
though it is burdensome in the matter of finance
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it will have
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a positive
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impact on the country as it will increase the economic growth and as well as improve the standard of living of
people
.
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  • Rural areas
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  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
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  • Public expenditure
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  • Accessibility
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