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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

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Nowadays, most
of
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the
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people were having a major concern about their income. Working a lot and at the end of the day thinking about their bills, expenses and allowances. Workers were having myriad concerns about
job
satisfaction
.
For instance
, working in other fields.
Firstly
, as an adult, one will have a fear about their personal (or) family well being. Everyone wants to provide
their
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 best for their family.
For instance
, every
job
 holder wants to give luxurious life to his wife and children . So, he
do
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 not care about the
job
, he just wanted to be on the top and earn a lot.
Secondly
,
couple
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 of people just wanted to enjoy the
work
.
For example
, my sister, who studied masters in Electronics and Communications got myriad offers as a software developer but, she had rejected all believing that she can get a
job
 in chip designing. After 2 months she got placed in Intel.
Furthermore
, she had a promotion as
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 head.
Additionally
,
Job
satisfaction
 should be
important
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 part
in
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work
 life. As elderly people
said
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 “We should not run towards money, money should run after us”.
Work
satisfaction
 is important rather than making high capital. Henceforth, Earning
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huge capital without
work
satisfaction
 can cause stress.
On the other hand
, loving the
job
 is key to Happiness and prosperity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • wellbeing
  • contribute
  • meaningful work
  • work-life balance
  • career progression
  • workplace environment
  • recognition
  • constructive feedback
  • compensation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • autonomy
  • skills match
  • interests match
  • variety
  • challenge
  • economic conditions
  • labor market
  • individual expectations
  • job role
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